Monday, January 11, 2010

Journal 20

Beautiful but Troublesome

Fireworks in Hawaii are beautiful. They make gorgeous artwork in the sky that makes lots of people say "aww, that's so pretty!". Fireworks also are believed to start the new year "with a bang". There are many traditions involving fireworks at the beginning of the year. Although they may seem to be beautiful, they make a lot of smoke. When the are is filled with lots of smoke, it gives breathing problems to lots of people. Although someone will not have a lung problem, they still have trouble breathing. If someone has breathing problems, the air quality on New Years Eve makes it more difficult for them to breathe. Facts state that 13.5% of people in Hawaii struggle with breathing. When the fireworks cause pollution in the air, the 13.5% of people with breathing problems have a higher chance of death. Even though fireworks are beautiful, it also can cause many problems. Everyone should be able to breathe problem-free everyday of their life.

1 comment:

  1. Hi Alexis,
    Nice job on your blog. Your title fits with the argument you are developing and you've done a good job of starting with a valid con and then establishing and supporting your pro argument.
    assessment score: 3/4
    mrs s

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