Over the years, my writing styles change and improve. I think that I achieved a lot over the years because improvement comes with repetition. I enjoy writing because I can put my input on how I feel on things, and I can use my voice and express my feelings. My favorite paper that I have written was an essay about what we wanted to be when we grow up and how we would achieve that goal. I really enjoyed this paper because it made me get prepared for real life. It made me realize that college is not cheap, and that I should embrace it as best as I can. We had to research the bumps in the road that would help us get to college. I enjoyed writing this paper because I got to use a lot of voice since it was a paper all about me. I enjoy writing papers about me because I feel like I can be unlimited with what I write.
My goal for this year is to write papers that more people can relate to. I want to put more of my perspective and voice into the papers I write. I feel as if voice means a lot when writing a paper. I also want to use more words that describe better to help my writing be more descriptive and enjoyable.
Hi Alexis!
ReplyDeleteThat "what do I want to be" paper sounds like it was a great one, both for voice and for the information you gained as you did the research for it.
You've got great goals for the coming year. We'll continue to work on voice and perspective and will also focus on argumentative writing, like your pre-assessment essay on technology and cheating.
So...here's my response on that essay:
You have a good idea of thesis creation and you present the two sides of the "technology/cheating" issue in your essay. You also refer to the article by Marc Prensky to support your opinion.
The trait to work on, I think, is "ideas" because you could do more to show how technology will "help us get to the 21st century."
Much of the content in the essay is refuting the "cheating" con point but you also need to support your "pro" point and show specific ways that tech can help students learn. More specific examples, would, in turn, help to improve your word choice because you would refer specifically to technology and used the terminology of tech to provide detail and authenticity to your ideas and arguments.
In the area of "conventions"--we'll be working on pronoun use. I notice that your essay refers to "kids" and "a kid" and "a child" and "they"...the singulars and the plurals get mixed up, so we'll work to correct that.
Okay...I think we're set for a great year!
I'll comment on your COA essay as soon as I see your two "gives" on your partners' blogs :)
mrs s
Hey Mrs.S,
ReplyDeleteThat was my favorite paper! It made me think about college and the future of my life. Im really excited to start writing about that this year as well. (:
I cant recall why, but it was a little hard for me to find arguments that matched what I was writing about. Its always good to get better so I'm excited to work on my conventions.
-Lexie